Revised Script

We had to amend out original script in order to adjust to the changes and developments we had made in the production of our film opening, such as casting. The casting of the character Olivia is evidence of a change we made, we changed Olivia into a male (Oliver) to be reflective of modern day society which features relationships between males and females. Although, we have altered the original script we believe the revised script still embodies the ideas and values founded in the original script of 'Planet Mary.

Exterior long shot of the school

Inside the school

Long Shot

Geeky girl walking through crowded corridor carrying books.

Mary

(Narration) Ok, that's me over there living and surviving in the reality of a harsh planet

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Over the shoulder shot

we all call school, where we are all fed from

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Long shot

a golden fountain of knowledge, yeah right. School is just a place where a Jedi like myself

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Point of view shot (from Mary)

[Mary is seen staring at Scott]

Long shot of Scott Williams

will not be with a guy like that. Leaving us all to fight

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Medium shot of Mary

the most important battle in the world.

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Medium shot of Scott

Loving someone who would never love you back.

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Medium shot of Mary

Maybe I am going a tad overboard or maybe I am not,

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Medium shot of Scott

but anyway my name is Mary Watkins

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Medium shot of Mary

and yes if you have not already guessed

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Close up shot of Scott

I am utterly

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Two shot of Mary and Oliver

in love with Scott Williams.

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Medium shot of Mary and Oliver

Mary is seen staring at Scott

Oliver

Mary?
[Shakes Mary]

Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

is it safe to land yet?

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Point of view shot of Mary looking at Scott
(Medium shot of Scott)
[Scott is seen texting]

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Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

Do you come in peace and carry Scott Williams?

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Over the shoulder shot from Mary to Oliver

Oliver

I come with love and M&M’s will that do?
[Shows M&M’s.]

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Medium shot of Mary and Oliver

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Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

It would be rude to say no.

[Both characters laughs]

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Over the shoulder shot from Mary to Oliver

Oliver

Anyway, I will see you in Science.

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Medium Shot of Oliver and Mary

Oliver

Feel the force
[Raises hand to high five]

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Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

Feel the force
[Raises hand to high five]

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Medium Shot of Mary and Oliver
[Both characters engage in a high five, however they miss]

Oliver
[Exits by walking down the corridor]

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Two shot of Scott and Mary
[Mary is seen walking down the corridor in Scott’s direction]

Scott

Heads up!

[A ball hits Mary on her head, she falls to the ground]

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Point of view shot from Mary
[The camera tracks her fall]

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Low angle point of view shot of Mary

Mary is seen looking up to the ceiling

Camera pans to Scott looking at Mary

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Two shot of Scott and Mary
[Mary is seen on the floor and Scott is kneeling down to her]

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Close up shot of Scott holding Mary’s hand

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Over the shoulder shot from Scott to Mary
[Scott is seen helping Mary up]
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Medium Shot of Scott and Mary

Scott

You ok?

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Long shot

[Characters are seen looking at each other]

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Point of view shot from Scott to Mary

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Medium shot

Scott

No Problem
[Scott exits]

Mary
[Watches Scott exit]

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Point of view shot from Mary
[Continues to watch Scott leave]

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Medium shot of Mary

[Holding her books, looking down the corridor]