Audience Feedback

Overall, we believe the feedback received regarding our real media product ‘Planet Mary’ was a fair evaluation.

The non-diegetic music ‘Feel the force’ was played throughout our media product and it was identified by the audience as being ‘effective as it expressed the initial mood of the opening and the overall genre effectively’. This positive feedback allows us to understand we were successful in enabling the audience to connect to our chosen genre teenager comedy genre. In the music the lyrics include the phrase ‘feel the force’ and this positive phrase allows the audience to relate this to the geek because it could be considered as empowerment in regards to her being an outcast. Also the non-diegetic music aided the audience to understand the representation of ‘the main character and the idea that she is a geek’. As a group we wanted the music to clearly outline our main character as being a geek because we wanted to highlight that the ‘geek’ character is a typical form and convention of a teenage comedy film.

On the other hand, it was suggested ‘The music goes on for a fairly long amount of time’. We believe this comment is fair because it runs constantly throughout our media product and it accompanies our dialogue. We chose to include non-diegetic music throughout our film opening because during the research process we found it to be form and convention in the teenage comedy genre. From research we viewed the the opening of a real media product ‘Never Been Kissed’ which has the inclusion of non-diegetic music until 1.58 seconds however, in contrast to our media product they fade the music from 1.38 seconds to make the dialogue between two character more prominent. In reflection we believe this is successful in delivery clarity to the audience because it allows the audience to identify with genre through the dialogue taking place. We believe we should have incorporated a fade in our music as seen in the real media product in order to make the dialogue more prominent because it was suggested ‘The song overpowers the dialogue in some areas’.

Furthermore, it was highlighted in the audience feedback ‘More rehearsal time could have been used’ ‘so that the characters interaction with one another was practised and didn’t look rushed ‘. As a group we viewed it as important for the audience to form a connection with the character central to the narrative because we wanted to create a feeling of empathy for her due to her being an outcast. However, from that comment we believe we was unsuccessful in achieving this because audience felt the ‘interaction’ looked ‘rushed’. Taking this into consideration we believe we should have used ‘more rehearsal time’ to make sure the interaction between the characters appeared less rushed and verisimilitude.

Moreover, the titles of our product were considered as being ‘a bit dull in terms of colour and font’. The colour of the titles was white and the font was a basic font which was founded in the settings of iMovie9. Upon reflection I agree with this comment although the colour of the font was white and reflected purity, I believe it was basic and did not follow the forms and conventions of a teenage comedy genre. Pink is a colour commonly used in a teenage comedy genre because it represents femininity however, our choice of colour white left the audience confused to what we wanted to reflect in regards to our chosen genre teen comedy. In addition to this the font also did not represent our chosen genre effectively, from research we found a font which is similar to females handwriting allows the audience to reflect to the genre successfully. As a group we feel we should have used a font that was similar to the penmanship of a female.

Planet Mary Film Evaluation

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Planet Mary

Revised Storyboard

Shooting Schedule Revised 2

Shooting Schedule Revised 1

Revised character profile 2

Character profile:
Name: Mary
Costume: Geek glasses, Grey print t-shirt, black skirt, black tights, trainers.
Characteristics: Star wars fanatic, nerd, timid, naive and outcast.
Gesture/Movement: Enclosed and snorts whilst laughing.
Representations: Social class – she derives from a working class background.
Possible casting ideas:
Who? Catherine Browning
Why? We decided to use Catherine because we felt she would be a sutiable candiate to play the role of Mary because she is reliable.

Character profile:
Name: Oliver
Costume: Green t-shirt,jeans and pumps.
Characteristics: Happy, crazy, impulsive and star wars fanatic.
Gesture/Movement: Walks quickly.
Representations: Gender
Who? Andrew Delaney
Why? We decided to work against the classic convention of same sex close relationships.

Character profile:
Name: Scott
Costume: Checkered shirt, Blue denim jeans, Trainers or pumps.
Characteristics: Cool, laid back, smart, friendly and popular.
Gesture/Movement: Walks with a cool grace
Representations: Gender
Possible casting ideas:
Who? George Bramhall
Why? George reflects the characteristics of Scott he is laid back and popular in the sixth form community.

Revised Character Profile 1

Character profile:

Name: Mary

Costume: Geek glasses, red jumper, black knee-length skirt, trainers.

Characteristics:  Star wars fanatic, nerd, timid, naive and outcast.

Gesture/Movement: Enclose and snorts whilst laughing.

Representations: Social class – she derives from a working class background.

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Asia Wray

Why?  I have previous acting experience and the previous female casting ideas for this role were unavailable.

Character profile:

Name:  Olivia

Costume: Hair down, blue hoody, blue jeggins and boots.

Characteristics:  Happy, crazy, impulsive and star wars fanatic.

Gesture/Movement: Walks quickly.

Representations: Social class – she comes from a middle class background.

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Jade Senior

Why?  Jade has previous acting experience and shows commitment to all aspects of her work.

Character profile:

Name:  Scott

Costume: Checkered shirt, Blue denim jeans, Trainers or pumps.

Characteristics: Cool, laid back, smart, friendly and popular.

Gesture/Movement: Walks with a cool grace

Representations: Gender

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Jayon Virdi

Why?  Jayon is a reliable friendly candidate and he has a good fashion sense.

Character profile:

Name: Taylor

Costume: Hair down, cardigan, top, jeans, suede boots.

Characteristics:  Manipulative, defensive, intimidating and self-absorbed.

Gesture/Movement:  Gesture and movement are dramatic and she hips lead when she walks.

Representations: Gender

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Grace Wright

Why?  The potential casting ideas were unavailable however we also believed Grace could embody the role of Taylor.

Revised Script

We had to amend out original script in order to adjust to the changes and developments we had made in the production of our film opening, such as casting. The casting of the character Olivia is evidence of a change we made, we changed Olivia into a male (Oliver) to be reflective of modern day society which features relationships between males and females. Although, we have altered the original script we believe the revised script still embodies the ideas and values founded in the original script of 'Planet Mary.

Exterior long shot of the school

Inside the school

Long Shot

Geeky girl walking through crowded corridor carrying books.

Mary

(Narration) Ok, that's me over there living and surviving in the reality of a harsh planet

Straight cut

Over the shoulder shot

we all call school, where we are all fed from

Straight cut

Long shot

a golden fountain of knowledge, yeah right. School is just a place where a Jedi like myself

Straight cut

Point of view shot (from Mary)

[Mary is seen staring at Scott]

Long shot of Scott Williams

will not be with a guy like that. Leaving us all to fight

Straight cut

Medium shot of Mary

the most important battle in the world.

Straight cut

Medium shot of Scott

Loving someone who would never love you back.

Straight cut

Medium shot of Mary

Maybe I am going a tad overboard or maybe I am not,

Straight Cut

Medium shot of Scott

but anyway my name is Mary Watkins

Straight cut

Medium shot of Mary

and yes if you have not already guessed

Straight cut

Close up shot of Scott

I am utterly

Straight cut

Two shot of Mary and Oliver

in love with Scott Williams.

Straight Cut

Medium shot of Mary and Oliver

Mary is seen staring at Scott

Oliver

Mary?
[Shakes Mary]

Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

is it safe to land yet?

Straight Cut

Point of view shot of Mary looking at Scott
(Medium shot of Scott)
[Scott is seen texting]

Straight Cut

Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

Do you come in peace and carry Scott Williams?

Straight Cut

Over the shoulder shot from Mary to Oliver

Oliver

I come with love and M&M’s will that do?
[Shows M&M’s.]

Straight cut

Medium shot of Mary and Oliver

Straight Cut

Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

It would be rude to say no.

[Both characters laughs]

Straight cut

Over the shoulder shot from Mary to Oliver

Oliver

Anyway, I will see you in Science.

Straight Cut

Medium Shot of Oliver and Mary

Oliver

Feel the force
[Raises hand to high five]

Straight Cut

Over the shoulder shot from Oliver to Mary

Mary

Feel the force
[Raises hand to high five]

Straight Cut

Medium Shot of Mary and Oliver
[Both characters engage in a high five, however they miss]

Oliver
[Exits by walking down the corridor]

Straight Cut

Two shot of Scott and Mary
[Mary is seen walking down the corridor in Scott’s direction]

Scott

Heads up!

[A ball hits Mary on her head, she falls to the ground]

Straight cut

Point of view shot from Mary
[The camera tracks her fall]

Straight Cut

Low angle point of view shot of Mary

Mary is seen looking up to the ceiling

Camera pans to Scott looking at Mary

Straight cut

Two shot of Scott and Mary
[Mary is seen on the floor and Scott is kneeling down to her]

Straight cut

Close up shot of Scott holding Mary’s hand

Straight cut

Over the shoulder shot from Scott to Mary
[Scott is seen helping Mary up]
Straight cut

Medium Shot of Scott and Mary

Scott

You ok?

Straight cut

Long shot

[Characters are seen looking at each other]

Straight cut

Point of view shot from Scott to Mary

Straight Cut

Medium shot

Scott

No Problem
[Scott exits]

Mary
[Watches Scott exit]

Straight cut

Point of view shot from Mary
[Continues to watch Scott leave]

Straight cut

Medium shot of Mary

[Holding her books, looking down the corridor]

Preliminary exercise

Shooting Schedule

Character profile

Character profile:

Name: Mary

Costume: Princess Leila hair, Geek glasses, Red cardigan, Band T-shirt, Knee length, Denim skirt, Stripy sock and boots.

Characteristics:  Star wars fanatic, nerd, timid, naive and outcast.

Gesture/Movement: Enclosed, scurries whilst walking.

Representations: Social class – she derives from a working class background.

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Charlotte Beddows

Why?  Charlotte is a reliable candidate with previous acting experience; she also has a versatile appearance.

Who? Kate Rogers

Why? Kate is a reliable candidate who is organised and we believe she could portray a geeky stereotype.

Character profile:

Name:  Olivia

Costume: Hair tied back, black top, denim jeans, badges and trainers

Characteristics:  Happy, crazy, impulsive and star wars fanatic.

Gesture/Movement: Habit of putting hair behind her ears, skip whilst she walks.

Representations: Social class – she comes from a middle class background.

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Jasmine

Why? Jasmine shares qualities with Olivia she is a happy go lucky girl and she is full of energy.

Who? Anna Alcock

Why?  Anna is a jolly individual who has a previous acting background and is committed to her work.

Character profile:

Name:  Scott

Costume: White T-shirt, Blue denim jeans, Trainers or pumps.

Characteristics: Cool, laid back, smart, friendly and popular.

Gesture/Movement: Walks with a cool grace

Representations: Gender

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Iain Boyce

Why? Iain is a clean-cut boy who is popular figure in the sixth form community.

Who? Kyle Roberts

Why? Kyle is a popular individual and he is easy to get along with and we believe these qualities reflect those of Scott.

Who? Jayon Virdi

Why?  Jayon is a reliable candidate and he has a good fashion sense.

Who? Peter Brown

Why? Peter is reliable and he is committed to all tasks presented to him.

Character profile:

Name: Taylor

Costume: Hair down, Makeup – red lipstick, tight top, skirt and shoes/boots or heels.

Characteristics:  Manipulative, provocative, defensive, intimidating, self-absorbed.

Gesture/Movement:  Gesture and movement are dramatic and she hips lead when she walks.

Representations: Gender

Possible casting ideas:

Who? Helen Carter

Why?  Helen a wealth of acting experience and she is a popular individual amongst her sixth form community.

Who? Stephanie Little

Why? Stephanie takes pride in her appearance and she is popular female.

Who? Rosalyne Norford

Why?  Rosalyne has previous acting experience and she is a committed reliable individual who takes pride in all aspects of her work.

Storyboard

Film script

In the school

long shot

Geeky girl walking through crowded corridor carrying books.

straight cut

close up shot

Mary

(Narration) Ok, that's me over there

straight cut

medium shot

living and surviving

straight cut

long shot

in the realms of a concrete

CAMERA ZOOMS TO A CLOSE UP SHOT OF STUDENTS BEHAVING LIKE ANIMALS

jungle, where we are all fed from that 

straight cut to a teacher talking expressively

medium shot

golden fountain of knowledge.

straight cut

(pause) Yeah, right school is just a place where our captors cage us, and leave us to fight the most important battle in the world.

jump cut to a star wars clip of a star ship

Star ship to Star ship.

straight cut

medium shot

Maybe I am going a bit overboard or maybe I am not, but anyway my name is Mary Watkins and I am totally and utterly in love with

straight cut

Scott Williams

close up shot

Scott Williams is seen in slow motion drinking a bottle of water

camera zooms out

long shot

straight cut

point-of-view shot(long shot)

Mary is seen staring at Scott

Olivia

Earth calling Mary, Earth to Mary, is it safe to land yet?

Olivia is not seen in this shot

jump cut

Medium shot of Mary and Olivia

MARY

Do you come in peace and carry Scott Williams?

OLIVIA

I come with love and skittles will that do?

MARY

I guess it would be rude to say no.

Both characters laugh, Mary snorts.

Mary

Marry me, Marry me Mr Scott Williams, take my hand.

OLIVIA

In five years time he will say yes Mary Watkins, yes.

MARY

Do you really think that? I do hope your right.

OLIVIA

Feel the force

Olivia holds up her hand

MARY

Feel the force

Mary holds up her hand

Close up shot

Both characters high five

male voice

off shot

Shouts

camera tilts to ceiling

Heads up!

Mary is seen looking up to the ceiling

camera crane

high angle point of view shot

Mary falls to the ground revealing her underwear

CAMERA CRANE

Long shot

STRAIGHT CUT

CLOSE UP SHOT OF MARY ON THE GROUND

voice

Wow embarrassing, much?

MARY

straight cut

high angle point of view shot

Narration

Now this would be the moment in my life in which a) wished I had participated in more P.E lessons and my reaction time was better and b) earth would banish me to outer Galatia. But fortunately neither of them wishes had to happen.

straight cut

low angle point of view show

Scott

Hey, you alright

Straight cut

close up shot

Reaches out to Mary's hand

camera zooms out

medium shot

let me help you up.

Beat

Mary, right?

straight cut

medium low angle point of view shot

Mary stares in an embrace

straight cut

long shot

taylor

She stuck in a time warp,

JUMP CUT

MEDIUM SHOT

everyone look.She borrows her Grannies underwear,

Straight cut

close up low angle point of view shot

Granny pants, granny pants!

CAMERA TRACKS THE EXPRESSIONS IN THE CROWD

CLOSE UP SHOT

EXTREME CLOSE UP SHOT

Everyone laughs, except Scott and Olivia

straight cut

low angle point of view shot of mary

voice

What is she wearing, eurgh?

straight cut

close up shot

Mary

Welcome to inside the cage the place where you experience the best and worst days of your life all rolled up into one.

straight cut

high angle point of view shot of teenage crowd laughing

Well this as you can evidently see is my best day so far.